作文公开课
Topic : advertisement(广告)
随着科学技术的发展，广告在我们的日常生活中变得越来越重要，但是广告是 利是弊？
注意；1. 对所给要点，不要简单翻译，可适当发挥。
2. 词数不少于100词。
Advertisement As science and technology develops, advertisements have
important in our daily life. Advertisements have some bad effects on our daily make us upset.
I think advertising is useful. If we have enough facts from advertisements, we can easily make a much better choice.
Q:What qualities should a good composition ?
1. Organization
2. Content
3. Language
Task: how to make this passage perfect
增分策略一 使用高级词汇 in our daily life.
提示：With the development of …, /play a important part in
替换为：
增分策略二 句式变换
1. It is +强调部分+that+剩余部分 / As is known to all, / If there is no…, …will not …
2. 提示; It is + adj. + for sb. to do sth
增分策略三 巧用过渡连接表达
1. Advertisements help people get much information about new products. Company can sell more products than before. And some advertisements educate the public.
advertisements have some bad effects on our daily life. It wastes a lot of natural resources, which increases the cost of products. They mislead or even cheat consumers. They make us upset.
提示：Para.2 is about advantages of advertisements. Para3: is about disadvantages
, making use of ads, companies can promote the sales of , some advertisements educate the public.
it wastes a lot of natural resources, which increases the cost of they or even cheat us upset.
增分策略四 适当利用短语取代单词
How to express one’s opinion:
提示As far as I am concerned, , , …
, I think advertising is useful. If we have enough facts from advertisements, we can easily make a much better choice.
增分策略五 注重主题句
With the help of advertisements, people can get much information about new products. Making use of ads, companies can promote the sales of products. Some advertisements educate the public.