五句话作文的句子整合技巧
五句话作文的句子整合技巧
高考英语基础写作主要考查考生运用语言结构和基本句型,对表达内容进行加工、整合的能力。考生如果没有一定的语言驾驭技巧,要用五句话完整地表达众多繁杂的内容也绝非一件容易的事。下面以2011年广州一模的基础写作为例来谈谈写作的句子整合技巧。
原题:学校英语论坛针对目前城市交通拥堵、污染严重的问题进行了“治堵方案大家谈”的讨论。以下是讨论概要。
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1.存在的问题;
3) The air is seriously polluted.
4) Some solutions are put forward./Everyone is encouraged to offer suggestions.
5) Car owners could reduce the use of private cars.
6) They could share their cars with their friends and workmates.
7) The government should do something to improve the public transport system.
8) The government should build more green lanes.
9) The public transport system should be more convenient for citizens.
10) People should be encouraged to use their bicycles.
11) Money, time and energy will be saved.
12) The measures are friendly to the environment.
其中,1) —3) 涉及存在的问题,4) —10) 表达解决的方案,最后两点是方案的好处。接下来,我们来运用自己的语言知识,将相关的信息点整合起来。
一、 运用短语来整合信息
利用短语是合并信息,使句子简洁明了的有效方法。
1. 运用名词短语 (名词短语,整合信息点②、③)
2. 运用介词短语
People are more aware of the fact that increasing numbers of private cars has given rise to 介词短语充当定语,整合信息点②、③)
3. 运用非谓语短语 (动词不定式短语,整合信息点⑨) (动名词短语作主语和动词不定式短语作定语,整合信息点⑤、⑧、⑩)
There is a widespread concern over environmental pollution and traffic jams 过去分词短语作定语,整合信息点②) 现在分词短语作状语,整合信息点⑤)
4. 运用with 的复合宾语结构或独立主格结构
Hopefully, our city will definitely be an environment-friendly place to live in. (with的复合宾语结构,整合信息点⑥)
5. 运用词语搭配
三、 利用复合句来整合信息
复合句可以整合众多相关信息,同时也是语言功底的表现。
1. 运用名词性从句
运用同位语从句,整合信息点⑤、⑥)
2. 运用定语从句
运用定语从句,整合信息点②、③)
3. 运用状语从句
people to travel. (运用条件状语从句,整合信息点⑦)
当然,在实际写作中,我们要灵活、综合运用,使句子长短有致,简洁明了,同时使用关联词,使句与句之间更连贯流畅。我们可以将以上内容整合成五句话:
Recently, the issue of traffic jams and air pollution caused by private cars has been brought to the concern of all people, especially us students, who came up with some practical suggestions in a discussion. (信息点①——④) In our opinion, citizens could reduce the use of private cars
by sharing with their friends and workmates. (信息点⑤——⑥)Besides, what really matters is that the government improves the public transport system to make it more convenient for people to travel. (信息点⑦、⑨)Meanwhile, the government should have more green lanes built to encourage cycling. (信息点⑧、⑩)By taking the above measures, not only can we save money, time and energy but also we can contribute to a city with better environment.(信息点⑪——⑫)