2012专四预测作文作文
2011 四级考试写作备考:高分句型(1) 1. It 作先行主语和先行宾语的一些句型 She had said what it was necessary to say. 2. 强调句型 It is not who rules us that is important, but how he rules us. 3. 种现象的原因,提纲第 3 点要求谈谈“我” 对该现象的看法,由此可判断本文应为现象解释型作文。 根据所给提纲,本文应包含如下内容:描述近几年大学校园 内的“考证热”;分析越来越多的大学生热衷考取各种证书的主要 原因;阐述“我”对大学生“考证热”的看法。 高分范文 Certificate Craze On Campus In recent years, getting a certificate has become a new craze among college students. [1]Just randomly ask a student on campus what he or she is busy doing, [2]quite possibly, you may get the answer [3]that he or she is preparing for a certificate [2]of some kind. [4]Why does this craze appear? [4]There are mainly two reasons behind this phenomenon. First, [5]it is the employment pressure that forces college students to get more certificates. With the admission expansion of colleges, a lot more graduates have to face the fierce competition in the job market. How can one make himself more competitive? More certificates at hand, maybe. Second, diploma and certificates are still important standards [6]by which many employers measure a person’s ability.4In order to increase the qualifications for a job, the students compel themselves to run from one exam to another. [7]From my point of view, we should be more rational [8]when it comes to certificates, [9]since certificates [2]do not necessarily prove one’s ability. Being crazy in getting certifications blindly is [10]nothing but wasting time. To conclude, we should focus on improving our ability [10]but not getting a certificate of no practical value.【亮点点评】 亮点点评】[1]祈使句使用恰当。randomly 意为“随意地,随机地”。 [2]限定词使用恰当,使文章表达更严谨,增强了说服力。 [3]that 引导同位语从句,修饰 the idea。 [4]设问句引出原因,容易引起注意。 [5]强调句型,此处是强调主语。 [6]which 引导非限制性定语从句,充当介词宾语。 [7]用于引出“我”的观点。 [8]“当谈到或提及…时”。 [9]since 引导原因状语从句,表示既定的原因,常译为“既 然”。 [10]“只是,仅仅”。“而不是”。佳句临摩1.佳句: may get the answer that he or she is preparing for a You5certificate of some kind. 临摩:离婚率上升尽管令人难过,但却是不争的事实。 2.佳句:Diploma and certificates are still important standards by which many employers measure a person’s ability. 临摩: 在过去的三十年,发展中国家在许多方面都取得了 很大的进步,其中包括健康水平的提高。 3.佳句:From my point of view, we should be more rational when it comes to certificates. 临摩:我认为,对于我们来说,更重要的是尽可能提高自己 的能力而不是获得更多的证书。2: :1)现在很多大学生都喜欢追求名牌 2)产生这种现象的原因是什么 3)你如何看待这一现象Students’ Pursuit for Famous Brands 行文思路 本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第 1 点指出一种现象,提纲 第 2 点要求分析产生这种现象的原因,提纲第 3 点要求谈谈“我” 对该现象的看法,由此可判断本文应为现象解释型作文。 根据所给提纲,本文应包含如下内容:描述目前热衷于大学 生追求名牌的现象;分析大学生热衷名牌的原因;阐述“我”对大学6生追求名牌的看法并提出建议。 高分范文 Students’ Pursuit for Famous Brands Nowadays many college students like to pursue famous brands. From clothes to mobile phones, even study articles like electronic dictionaries and pens, they [1]are inclined to buy famous brands. [2]Moreover, many students from poor families begin to [3]follow this consumption trend as well. This phenomenon has aroused wide attention. [4]The following reasons can account for college students’ preference for famous brands. [2]Above all, in many college students’ eyes, a famous brand is a symbol of sophistication and taste. They expect others to admire their high class and good taste. [2]What’s more, in modern society, famous brands to some extent are equal to fashion, [5]which has a great attraction to young college students. [2]Besides, parents’ spoiling their children helps form their bad consumption habit. [2]As far as I am concerned, [6]it is irrational for college students to pursue famous brands. [3]After all, most of famous brands are [7]far beyond their consumption ability. [3]Besides, [8]it is not famous brands but a person’s noble character that really makes him high class. [3]Therefore, college students should attach more7importance to cultivating a good character [9]rather than pursuing famous brands.【亮点点评】 亮点点评】[1]“有…倾向”。 [2]过渡衔接词语,使文章条理清晰、意义连贯。 [3] follow 表示“跟随,追求(趋势或时尚)” [4]用于引出原因。 [5]which 引导非限制性定语从句。 [6] it 为形式主语,不定式为真正主语。 [7]“远远超出他们的消费能力”。 beyond 表示“超出…范围”。 [8]强调句型,此处是强调主语。not…but 连接并列成分。 [9]“而不是”。佳句临摹1. 佳句:It is irrational for college students to pursue famous brands. 临摹: 对大学生来说, 了解校园以外的世界是非常必要的。 2. 佳句:In modern society, famous brands to some extent are equal to fashion, which have a great attraction to young college students. 临摹:在世界上或许没有什么游戏像赌博 像赌博的那么有害和危险了,它经常会导致一个人破产,还 会玷污人的心灵。83. 佳 句 : Therefore, college students should attach more importance to cultivating a good character rather than pursuing famous brands. 临摹:很多同学经常玩电脑游戏,这是浪费时间,而不是一 种有益的放松方式。3: :1)简单介绍个人情况2)说明申请助学贷款的原因、数额 3)保证会合理利用贷款并表明还款的决心 A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan 行文思路 本题属于情景式命题,要求写一封申请信。根据所给提纲, 本文应包含如下内容:简单介绍自己的情况,表明写信目的:申 请助学贷款;说明申请助学贷款的原因、数额;保证合理利用贷款 并表明还款决心,最后表示感谢。 高分范文 A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan Sep 12th, 2008 To whom it may concern, I am a freshman of Lianhe University, [1]majoring in Applied Physics. I am writing in the hope that I may obtain a bank loan to support my study in Applied Physics for the following four years.9My parents are both laid-off workers, so it’s [2]beyond their power to finance me through the college education. [3]To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major operation. [4]Therefore, [5]with the college tuition becoming a much heavier burden on my family, I am compelled to apply a RMB20,000 bank loan. [6]I give you my promise that the loan would be used properly. [4]Meanwhile, I’ll [7]spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the loan. I would be greatly obliged if my application is granted. And I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Sincerely yours, Song Xue【亮点点评】 亮点点评】[1]“主修…”,现在分词作伴随状语。 [2]“超出…的能力范围”。 [3]“使事情更糟糕的是”。 [4]过渡衔接词语,使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。 [5]“with+宾语+宾补”的独立结构。 [6]“我保证…”,that 引导同位语从句。 [7]“不遗余力”。佳句临摩101.佳句:To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major operation. 临摩:令人更迷惑不解的是,很多飞机都从大海上离奇消失 了。 2.佳句:Therefore, the college tuition becoming a muchheavier burden on my family, I am compelled to apply a RMB20,000 bank loan. 临摩:由于周围交通不便利,人们只得步行回家。 3.佳句: Meanwhile, I’ll spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the loan. 临摩:全国人民都不遗余力地支持北京举办奥运会。11