名师:雅思图表作文6分范文实例解析

名师：雅思图表作文6分范文实例解析

在雅思考生中，普遍存在一种观点，认为小作文只占 1/3 的比重，而大作文占了 2/3 ，所以在复习的时候应该以大作文为重，考试的时候也应该先写大作文，而后再写小作文。但是在对考生实际考分的观察中我们发现，往往小作文写得好的同学，作文的总分相对较高。之前有个基础班的女生，把时间都花在了小作文上，大作文只写了个开头，但作文的总分居然拿到了 5 分。

这是什么原因呢？因为大作文在短时间内提高有限，而小作文却因套路很多，句式有限，在短时间内只要认真学习，就不难提高。所以要特别提醒广大考生，尤其是时间非常仓促的考生，千万不要忽视了小作文的学习！

以下提供的是一份 6 分的曲线图作文范文，后附考官的评语。同学们对照自己的文章，看下是否达到了 6 分的标准？

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题目：

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below gives information about cinema attendancein Australia between 1990 and the present, with projections to 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

【考生样文】

The graph shows percentages of cinema attendance at least once a year in Australia between 1990 to 2010 with projections for the future. The graph is described by 4 groups of different ages which are 14 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 49 and over 50 year olds.

The youngest age group people have been going to cinema more than any other age groups and the percentage has been keeping very high at

approximately90% since 1990. It is predicted to keep the high and to increase more from 2006.

The middle age groups people have enjoyed going cinema between 60% to 80%. The percentage of age 25 to 34 group has been higher than the one of age 35 to 49 group but from 2006 the percentage of 25 to 34 year olds people will decrease while the one of 35 to 49 year olds people will increase and get higher than the other one.

The oldest people seem to go cinema less than the other groups but the percentageof the attendance has slightly going up by 15% from 40% to 55% between 1990 to 2004 and it will keep increasing to 60% by 2010.

Overall, it seems the younger age people, the more going to cinema. (210 words)

【考官评语】

Band 6

This response addresses the requirements of the task and selects

relevant material to describe. Key features and an overview are presented, although clearer highlighting, more support and a more comprehensive overview would be needed to reach a higher band. Information is

well-organised and there is a clear overall progression in the response. There is some effective use of cohesive devices, but only limited use of reference

and substitution. The range of vocabulary is not wide, but it is adequate for the task. Control of word form and spelling is consistentlygood, although there are some clumsy noun phrases that indicatelimited flexibility. The candidate

attempts to use a mix of simple and complex sentences, but control is variable and grammatical errors or omissionsare quite intrusive at times. Figures are poorly integrated into sentences and indicate evident limitations.