高考英语(柱状图式)作文写作

如何进行图表式(柱状图式) 作文写作

假如你叫Jim Lee，你最近对你班60名同学(男女各半) 进行了上网目的调查。现将调查结果(如下表所示) 用英语给某报社的编辑写一封信报告此事，以引起舆论关注。

注意：①报告应包括图表所示全部内容 ②叙述结果时要避免重复使用百分比。

③叙述过程中要适当添加评语。④词数100左右。

学生习作点评

Dear editor,

My name is Jim lee. I am a middle school student. Now, I did a research about the purpose of my classmates go on the line. There are 30% of boys and 20% girls read news on the computer. Have 20% boys and 15% girls send e-mails on-line. There are more girls (about 35%) than boys (about 5%) have a chat. About 10% boys and 10% girls used computers study. More boys than girls play games .

Yours

Jim

C o m m o n m i s t a k e s 汉语式英语

1. Most of the boys in order to play games while most girls in order to have a chat.

2. About 10% boys and 10% girls used computer study. 重复累赘

1. 20% of boys get on the Internet to send e-mails while 15% of girls get on the Internet to send e -mails .

2.The number of boys who like to play games is larger than the number of girls

句式单一, 平铺直叙

A. 30% boys and 20% girls go on-line in order to read news. 20% boys and girls go on-line to send e-mails. 5%boys and 35% girls want to chat with others. 10% boys and girls want to study on-line. Besides, 35% boys and 20% girls go on-line to play games.

c o m p a r e A w i t h B. Girls ' favorite is chatting, but few boys like it . What boys like to do most is playing games and girls also like it. Both boys and girls like to read news or send e-mails on the Internet. As for studying, the number of boys and girls is equal

无关联词

1. Most of the girls like to chat. Most of the boys like to play games.

2. Computers have changed the world greatly. We should make full use of them. It will become a tool of our study.

图表式(柱状图式) 书面表达的基本框架

1. Topic (introductory sentences )

2. Body (supporting sentences )

3. Conclusion (conclusion sentences )

柱状图式作文写作的步骤:

一、开头 ： 二、分析数据： 三、得出结论：

点名本图表所反映的主题, 常见的词汇有： table, chart, figure, graph, tell, show. 数据分析

分析数据间主要差异及趋势, 然后描写在描写数据间变化及总趋势特征时, 可采用分类式或对比式, 以支持主题, 并阐明必要的理由, 特别要注意层次清楚，常用词汇有: compare ...to /with , compared to /with , in contrast to .

用于比较相同点的：as...as , the same as, similar to , like , equally important

用于比较不同点的：unlike , on the other hand , instead , different, from , difference , between (among ).

归纳总结或发表评论(有时第三步可省略) 常用词汇有:

to sum up , finally ,in conclusion ,at last , in summary , on the whole ,

in short , all in all , in a word ,in the end , in other words , therefore , as a result , generally speaking ,

As I have shown ..., As has been stated ,

常用句式结构: I have recently made a survey among........

A research has been made recently among......

I'm writing to tell you about my research about......

Different people have different ideas about.....

Somebody's favorite is...while others....

What somebody likes to do most is...

Both ...and .....would like to ...

As for..., the number .....equal...

The second largest group would like to ....

The second choice for somebody is to ... As I have shown... ；As has been stated… ；In my opinion... ；I think...

柱状图式作文写作要注意：

三要：

1. 要找出对比最为明显的突破点。 2. 要找出对比较明显的要点。

3. 找出双方非常相似的要点 。

三 忌：

1. 忌从左到右依此描述。 2.忌反复使用同一句型。3. 忌反复出现纷繁复杂的数据

下面是某高中对该校200名学生（男女各半）的择业观做出调查后绘制的图表，根据该图所反映的情况用英语写一则报道。

注意：1. 词数100左右； 2.参考词汇：鲜明的对比－－striking contrast

A possible version

I have recently made a survey about middle school students’ choice of their future jobs. They have different ideas about it. The most striking contrast is in teaching. 30% of the girls would like to become teachers while only 5% of the boys want to do this job. 20% of the boys want to do business and another 20% want to become lawyers while girls take up 15% in these fields . What boys like to do most is to become managers and the second largest group would like to be scientists .Besides teaching , the second choice for girls is to be scientists and

managers .The number is not small. Girls also expect to show their abilities in these two fields.